Octain Refrain
The Octain, full name Octain Refrain, is a form of poetry developed by English poet
Luke Prater in December 2010.
It comprises eight lines as two tercets and a couplet, either as octosyllables (counting eight syllables per line), or as iambic tetrameter,
whichever is preferable. Trochaic tetrameter also acceptable. The latter yields a more propulsive rhythm, as opposed to iambs, which lilt.
As the name suggests, the first line is a refrain, repeated as the last (some variation of refrain acceptable). Rhyme-scheme as follows -
A-b-b
a-c/c-a
b-A
A = refrain line. c/c refers to line five having midline (internal) rhyme (e.g. here/sneer), which is different to the a- and b-rhymes.
The midline rhyme does not have to fall exactly in the middle of the line, in fact it can be more effective and subtle, depending on
context, to have it fall earlier or later.
Alternative layout/stanza-structure:
Refrain lines out on their own, with the middle six as two tercets -
A
b-b-a
c/c-a-b
A
The High Octain is simply a double Octain, but as one poem - the refrains are the same, a- and b- rhymes are the same,
but actual words are different, and the c/c line with the internal rhyme can optionally be rhymed in the second instance.
There is no restriction on the level of repetition, but in most cases the stipulated refrain A is enough; this may even feel
too repetitive and need varying. As a general guideline, changing up to four syllables of the eight still retains enough to
feel like the refrain. The end word must remain the same.
The structure of the High Octain is one single after another with a break in between; alternatively, it can be written as two blocks of eight lines:
A-b-b-a-c/c-a-b-A
A-b-b-a-c/c-a-b-A [or d/d instead of c/c]
It is also possible to write a piece consisting of a string of single Octains (the rhymes of which would not usually correspond).
Example #1:
Deference (single Octain)
True deference is how I view
our meetings, cradled, innocent.
Our greetings peel, are quickly spent -
hours bulge, disfigure, warp, with you.
These keen eyes trace a joyful face
each time two friends embrace anew.
From other lifetimes roads are leant -
true deference, my point of view.
Copyright © 2011 Luke Prater
Example #2:
beware the child (single Octain, alternative format)
beware the child in each of us
no matter how we count the years
our toddler falls and wails with tears
attention gained with ill-timed fuss
with drama queens who stir up scenes
enough to make the saintly cuss
we thank the fates for patient peers
beware the child in each of us
Copyright © 2011 Beth Winter
Website - Eclisping Winter
Example #3:
Unhinge (High Octain)
O Kýrie, eléison.
Engorging, slick, devour her skin;
Man's avarice runs down his chin.
Atomic Power: blunt shotgun.
Her rising call, she'll take us all,
tectonic plates unhinge the sun
with no respite, no interim -
O Christe, O eléison.
O Kýrie, eléison.
False credit, carriage, blacksack bin,
can't hear the birds, can't hear them sing;
endangered species face the gun.
Her rising thrall will force the fall,
one grimreap day will see us done.
In gouging: sick, sick in her skin -
O Christe, O eléison.
Copyright © 2011 Luke Prater
Example #4:
andante (High Octain - alternative format)
adagio thoughts inhabit me
beside the mountains or the shore
i live for music, nothing more
alone and aimless, desult'ry
i play the blues, and drink my booze
then jazz it up to vivace
when morning comes, toss out the score
adagio thoughts return to me
adagio thoughts, defeating me
gravissimo my very core
depart my music at the door
though from myself, there's hope to flee
and finding muse in nature’s clues
a gift of music sets me free
once more, allow melodic roar
as dolce thoughts come back to me
andante -- moderate
adagio -- slow
vivace -- lively
gravissimo -- most grave
dolce -- sweet
Copyright © 2011 Victoria Ceretto-Slotto
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